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I think this poem needs an additional stanza or two that highlights an idea that was probably a background influence but didn't come to the surface as much as it should have. The source (or at least one significant source) of people's anger against God and a desire to make him go away is the...

This one may be pretty hard to follow. The basic idea is to critically describe the hopelessness of life under the assumption that God does not exist, and to draw out some of the proclaimed implications of that as "stories" that people tell when they gather in darkness around a bonfire made out...

I like this one a lot!

Universe coming from nothing and by nothing perhaps going back to where it came. No sight or sound of purpose. No true meaning to any name. Emptiness of insignificance in the cosmic scale, heart of the night renting at discount rates aplenty. Pick your secret room for the slowly dying, to...

He had problems with YouTube giving him false strikes and taking down videos on frivolous basis. Often he won the appeals when getting enough publicity on bogus action like that, but keeping on doing what he did and relying on one YT channel would have resulted in his whole ministry coming...

This is probably one of the most impressive testimonies that I've seen or heard. The original video got deleted when David decided to restart his channels and social media presence (still in the process of being fully set up). So the original video got lots of views, but this one from a channel...

Thank you. I like the review. The details are largely in line with what I had in mind. I'll add some commentary about some overarching "big ideas" behind the poem. The starting-points of the central ideas of this poem: 1. The Old Testament concept of swords being beaten into ploughshares. 2...

It may take a few days but I do plan to write more. I have a few unfinished poems, one of which took a step forward today but will require more work. If you happen to be interested in interacting more with the ones that I've already written, could you perhaps post a reply on the "Sword of...

This is a great poem about holding on to your integrity, which certainly isn't easy in todays world (if it ever was) so it is very timely. I actually had to read "Will you still your integrity hold? " a few times before I realized that it's not a grammatical error, so now I feel kind of dumb. :LOL:

There are some things that I would have changed if I hadn't been in a rush to get this finished and posted. And this forum only allows editing for 5 minutes, so I'll let this stand as it is for now.

You feel the shady streams that flow to places deep dark below from secret chambers under your shadow beyond love's faintest glow. Despair won't make you float, as torrents splash you about. Where are you going? Where are you taken? Do you know? Do you want to know? You may say it's not you...

There is a lot of Biblical and meta-Biblical imagery (both on the surface and a bit below it) that I tried to pack into this one (perhaps even too much for some tastes). But I'd like to get at least the first reaction before explaining some of the less obvious imagery.

Thanks for the compliment, but I don't know if that's true. If I am in some sense good at writing poetry, it may be due to some intuitive grasp of symbolism and stylistic nuances, coupled with fascination of some grand theological themes that seem to work with this type of poetry. But I'm still...

Hmm, somehow it hasn't occurred to me that it could be interpreted that way. In fact, I still have a hard time reading it that way. But obviously it can be read that way if you did. Perhaps I should consider revising it. What I meant was: 1. Jesus was buried in a tomb that was bought for...

Behold the man, the Lamb of God. Suffering, redeeming, saving us all. The chain broken, the garden restored, the veil ripped in two. The great gates of heart opened to what was, to what is, to what is yet to come. Sword of death so bent on destruction now transformed by each blow on the anvil...

The "I tried to stop that from happening but everything happened so fast" part makes me think that this may not have been exactly what one would typically call a belief. Can you really "stop a belief" like that? I wouldn't necessarily draw as hard a distinction between "beliefs" that occur very...

Hmm, it seems clear enough to me, but I may well be missing something. What's the unclarity or disjointedness with this part if you could describe it more? Not saying that you are wrong though. I wrote this one in Finnish, and it may have lost some of the original style when I translated it. I...

Yes, indeed. Funny that I missed that part.

Personally, I think I like this one a lot even without rhymes, but there are some suboptimalities with it. I may consider rewriting it so that it rhymes. Also, did you catch the change of focus near the end of the poem (when it becomes about humans bearing the image of God)? That could have been...

I haven't studied these issues in any great detail, and perhaps others have already touched on the same points in this thread, but I'll just try to add my 2 cents. It's important to distinguish multiple issues that tend to be lumped together: 1. Is there intelligent life in the universe...