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It's especially valuable for me when I get information on what specific things make my poems good or not so good. Sometimes the number of likes is higher on a poem that I personally like less than one that I like more. So while this forum provides such a small sampling that some of the variance...

No, I like all feedback and constructive suggestions. Keep them coming!

Interesting thoughts on the image of God, using the life of Elvis as an example:

Once-in-a-lifetime experience.

Learning to love again after pains is part of what I mean. (And also about learning to be loved, and being healed by the love, I think.) It's about a general theme of healing and restoration. That will happen fully when everything is made new, but in many ways it can be already part of our...

I like it. I wanted to focus on the idea that in one sense Jesus' request that the cup would be passed became also vicarious just as his death did because it was my/our cup that was passed. Your version is definitely clearer than how I worded it, and it still communicates most if not all of what...

Your perfection on my behalf acquires The precious gift of justification Your holy presence in me desires The purity of sanctification We are the broken ones You took the pain of restoration We are the prodigal sons Called arms open back to celebration Heavy steps in time became one Eternal...

So here it's also about both nature and spiritual things. We are "trapped in dark dungeons of our own making" in the natural world when it's cold and dark here and we need to stay mostly indoors to stay warm. But in a spiritual sense, the whole humankind is in a "dark dungeon of our own making"...

In the Arctic north, the four seasons are very different from each other, for example there's very little daylight in the middle of the freezing cold winter, and during midsummer, there's almost no darkness at all even during the night. So this poem is basically an attempt to look at nature and...

Sometimes it's hard to pin down just one definite meaning to the words of a poem. I would say that this is mostly about the hope of the future that God has promised to us. But it can help to motivate us and keep us living throug difficult times even here and now. The grieving mother without...

The last time I was in an amusement park ride was probably almost 20 years ago. I do seem to remember that this one was pretty fun:

This is the misty dawn of promises As waves of time move on the waters The grieving mother without solaces Soon rejoices with her daughters Broken wing for love to restore For the bird learning to fly again From stormy waters brought ashore With garden's healing rest to regain Image comes...

Yes, in the context of the poem, it means some kind of evil spiritual forces or beings. But poems can have a symbolic or metaphorical meaning, so I wanted to describe it so that one could really interpret it either way (literal evil spirit beings or the evil in a person's own heart). If I'm...

Sorry, I mean 1 Corinthians 13:12. Perhaps my fingers were one key too far to the right when I wrote that, so 12 became 23. :p Also I failed to explain what probably doesn't need an explanation, that the last line is also a reference to Jesus' words on the cross "It is finished."

I'll add some explanation about the line "As soul's nakedness meets its shame". This is a kind of conceptual word play on the Biblical ideas of nakedness and shame, connected to humans in the garden of Eden where they were naked but not ashamed before the fall and after the fall they covered...

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OK, here's an explanation of the entire poem. Sorry about its length. :p "You wake up in a maze of confusion" Most people's lives are a maze of confusion in many ways. Especially before they come to Christ, which is the situation that is described in the early part of this poem. "Stone...

Sure. You mean specific parts of it or the entire poem?