Suicide Prevention Poem

[Nevin]

Suicide Prevention Poem


LIFE is worth living bro' or sis'
DO take a step back from the abyss
No return ticket, many others will sorely YOU miss
In DEATH only, to receive a goodbye kiss

Suicide bent and in desperation?
Check a life's "balance sheet" calculation
"Well in profit" the clear estimation
Though perhaps more easily said, and seen, from our situation?

Time's a great healer, you WILL come back!
Spare others suffering pain from a tortuous rack
They'll witness you set upon a new joyous track
Journeying forth once more, one of the pack

Jesus has good works still for you, so wait
God's plan doesn't call you right now mate
Be patient, your terrible troubles will abate
Let friends' holy shoulders bear the great weight

It's way too early for the chapel's "Abide with me"
Unlike in the old films there's no sugary promise or guarantee
Yet, always happier to see "THE END" not in abject misery
Yo bro' or sis' hear our plea, "don't part from this earth prematurely"

You are a strong person, obviously
Talk with us and share, we'll listen sensitively
Together let's write down a Plan B
Do all this so you can LIVE ETERNALLY

ENDS


Nevin

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[Nevin]

82 seconds duration, my poem is now delivered as a professionally designed and produced video on Onslowsdry channel on YouTube. Over the weekend just past I conducted a straw poll of contacts and here is the feedback comments that I received:

Good evening all,

Feedback comments including three negative that were spoken, and wiith me trying not to misrepresent from memory, together with positive ones from South Africa and the United States, were as follows:



I can't be doing with anything that mentions Jesus.

"Its a beautiful and powerful poem and I thought the read version was more impactful than just reading it myself."

"I think this is great. Well done to all involved - you should be very proud of it."

"Thanks for sending the link for the video, it really is lovely. Keep it just as it is,"

"There's some nice imagery in the video - I especially like the use of the sunrise and sunset. Congratulations on getting this made."

"Wow - that is great! Who put it to music and moving images? I am no poet, but it makes a real impact."

"A very professional video. I have never been able to understand poetry… back to first year at high school, I guess I am just a philistine ."

"The video and poem is impressive. Just wonder about the title and how you catch people to watch it."

"Lovely video - well done."

"The video looks and sounds good. I hope that when it goes live that it is seen by a wide audience."

"Very nicely done J"

"Well done Nevin!"

"Can see it going totally viral!"

"i found the poem and video very moving even if it had rap connotations."

"My only comment is the use of “Bro and Sis”. Realise the impact to strike home with younger people acquainted with rap and as such it works well. I just wonder (as a seventy year old!) if it might be even be more powerful by missing these words out and I don’t think the poetic rhythm would suffer?"

A lot of people commit suicide because of financial problems. "Life's balance sheet" is insensitive to such as those, and I would advise not using these words.

As a lifelong agnostic I have a negative reaction to the mention of Jesus and to the overall Christian imagery. Moreover belonging as I do to an older generation I do not relate positively to either "bro" or "sis", whereas "mate" I find disrespectful.

"I like the mix of language - casual & informal mixed in with deeper and more formal. It works. Packs a punch."

"Beautiful"

"Beautiful scenes fit the words and music perfectly - don’t change anything Conceptually excellent "

"Here’s hoping it helps some to see a future and seek help from their brothers and sisters as well as Devine help in their time of need

Well done to all involved"


"Love it and the images are spot on."


A lot there to ponder, as we will do, and discuss tomorrow before the publicly accessible YouTube posting. Thank you to ALL contributors.

Yours sincerely,

Nevin

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The YouTube video link is here:

Fellow Christians, what say you "bro and sis"?